Essay One--Reflection

For this being my first essay in this class I am proud of how well I did. However, in rereading it I did not catch how frayed my supporting paragraphs were. I had too many ideas to present within a five paragraph essay. I need to work on picking my strongest points, or separate them so that they each have as much emphasis on my point as the rest. I also have a lot of trouble with where to use commas, as well as semicolons. For some reason I always seem to get them wrong, I need to work on getting that corrected so that I don’t have to worry about it anymore. Lastly I need to work on letting myself express my ideas in the way which they come out of my head instead of trying to make them fit into a “round hole.”